Feature Article Drafts

As I had already done a brain dump for the feature article, I was able to write a first draft incorporating the interview responses, personal opinions relevant to the issue I wanted to address. 

 

[My first draft.]

Suggestions:

• The word limit for my article was too much, and my teacher suggested I limit it to1000 words.

• She told me to reduce my personal opinions and experiences and focus more on the interviewees responses, as that would better the article. 

• She also told me that the article didn’t expose the gravity of the issue enough, and to work on that aspect more. 

• She also advised that it would be better to move certain parts of the article to the editors' note, as it was more of an introduction to the issue.

Following the suggestions given I was able to draft my second draft of the feature article. I limited my word count to 1000 and added a lot more responses from the interviewee.

 

My teacher gave me a few corrections in terms of ordering the paragraphs appropriately, as the article was much better this time.